Writing- abandoned places

-Abandoned places - writing
Our learning goals are to:

-write a description, using powerful words and phrases

-include some Te Reo Māori

-carefully check that our sentences make sense and have correct punctuation and spelling.

Choose one of the above images to prompt a piece of descriptive writing

        CRAMPY

One night, I had just brushed my teeth and was prepared to go to bed. I was looking out the window at the ocean and then I had heard this weird grumbling noise coming out from the sea. One minute was looking out the window, the next minute I was knocked over on the ground unconscious. Sometime later I woke up and realized that there was sand on the walls and everywhere else inside. You had to crawl to get outside because of all the sand on the ground was so high. Then I walked outside and there was sand the roofs as well. I said to myself under my breath, “What happened?” I went outside and children were coughing up water. All around them I could see their lifeless parents on the ground. I peaked right around the bend of a mansion and I saw a Wheke(Octopus), a mangō taniwha (Great white shark) and 13 honu (Green sea turtles) that were alive and breathing in air. I realized that these creatures were magical and were breathing in air. Suddenly it dawned on me that something strange had happened and that these creatures were trying to get me. I now realized why there was all this sand  everywhere. There had been a tsunami that had bought all these magical, evil creatures up to land. The first thing that I did was run straight back past the children and ran for my life. The buildings around me were creaking very quietly. It looked like the buildings were going to tip over from the weight of the sand. As I was running I looked behind me and they were getting closer to me. I wasn’t sure what to do...

                                                              By luken